Here's my first writing, an opinion essay, that I did a couple of weeks ago. My teacher helped me a little bit correcting the things that I did wrong. Sorry if my opinion offends someone, it is not my intention.
For this Opinion Essay, my teacher gave me a phrase and I have had to write what I think about.
So, first of all, I did a brainstorming (That I have copied down below) and then with my clearer opinions and helping myself with the brainstorming I started writing.
OPINION ESSAY
"It is often said that watching too much television makes people stupid" Do you agree?
·BRAINSTORMING
→Opinion: Watching
too much the television makes people stupid.
→Reasons:
1 .
If the teenagers watch a lot TV they don’t have enough
time to study/do homework.
2 .
Most of people watch the TV for entertaining not for
learning and they watch programs of comedy or of people fighting for no
reasons.
3 .
After a couple of hours or less the view is tired and
you can have problems about it.
→In conclusion:
1.
There are more bad reasons of watching too much the TV
that good.
2. We can spend more
time doing positive/productive things that watching TV.
.OPINION
Researches say that
in Spain we watch TV four hours per day; others say that watching the TV more
than three hours per day, the risk of death raises.
In my opinion,
watching the television makes people more stupid. I think that a lot of parents
say this, but the reason is not only because of TV, the problem is the parents,
that buy TVs for their children’s rooms, or they give permission to their kids
to watch the television too much. Do you agree with my opinion? If you’re not
sure, here are three reasons why I think that way.
First of all, most
of the people watch TV for entertaining not for learning and they watch
programs of comedy or of people fighting for no reasons, and they waste their
time. Moreover if we concentrate in teenagers, a lot of them watch TV and they
don’t study or do their homework. Lastly I have to say that after a couple of
hours or less, the sight is tired and you can have problems about it.
In conclusion, there are more bad reasons of watching
too much TV; and of course the time we spend watching it takes us time to do
other interesting things such as reading, running… positive and productive
things.
